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How can I make these sentences better and more "personal"?
1) As a teenager, my priority is to go to school and do well in all my classes. Outside of the classroom I have many interests and hobbies, such as dancing, and helping out in my community.
2) Kelvin is from China, he is very timid, and he had the latest sidekick in his bag.
3) I wanted to stand on top of a windy mountain and have my sweater flow towards my left. I yearned to throw my arms out wide and close my eyes under a blistering sun.
4) I was furious that i had to work with these people.
5) According to my perspective a leader is someone who possesses qualities like courage, creativity, honesty, hardworking and determination.
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1) As a high school student, it is my top priority to make the best grades I can, while also finding time to explore and develop my hobbies and interests such as dancing and engaging in my local community. 2) Kelvin from China is a shy person who was carrying the latest sidekick in his bag. 3) I dreamed of standing atop a windy mountain and feeling my sweater blowing to my left. I was desperate for the chance to throw my arms out wide and bask in the sun. 4) I felt outraged that I had to work alongside these people. 5) In my opinion, a leader is someone who embodies traits such as courage, creativity, honesty, hardworking, and determination.
